#1
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS:   interesting but circles are hard to resolve

#2
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:   interesting but needs more; feels mechanical

#3
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   _____3/4______

COMMENTS:   scale; timing; more interesting motion

#4
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   ____4_______

COMMENTS:   very close; needs more - particuarly scale and relation for writng / Design; more interesting movements - maybe continuation of detail motions along bottom / edges

#5
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS:   least interesting; again Writing & Design are where it is falling down - needs to make more of a statement; variation for "are"; 

#6
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   ____3/4_______

COMMENTS:   interesting idea that just didn't get to mature as much as it could of; make more active; don't stair step

#7
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   ____3/4_______

COMMENTS:   clarify horizontal; more interesting motion; take more risks - maybe look at another level of detail

#8
SCORE: ( 0 – 5 )   _____1______ Dogh Margins

COMMENTS:   interesting & close but safe; use baseline of writing to catch top edge - maybe play with masks; reposition and make stronger relations

If this had been for a grade, your average would be 3.4 / C+








On Feb 21, 2012, at 10:27 PM, dorian angello wrote:

Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   __3_________

COMMENTS:
type stair steps and feels too low.  

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ___5________

COMMENTS:
one of my favorites of today! all of the elements are designer choices and the movement is an animators choice. everything is aligned, clear, and easily read.  


#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____4_______

COMMENTS:
I love the fact you used dirty gritty images of the street. The movement isn't my favorite, I think it could be more interesting. 

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:
cool idea. nice design. A little too busy for me to read the type. Hold longer so I can translate it for my self and animate off the screen rather than a fade.  

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3_______

COMMENTS:
Not my favorite of yours but it works. It can me made more interesting if the placement wasn't so obvious: for example there is a straight line running through the middle that is a disconnect between the two sides. the type on the left is hard to read. 

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3.5_______

COMMENTS:
I like this idea. I like the dirt and grittiness that the textures give the composition. I think the movement on and off the frame can have that same feeling as well other than the sharpness it has now.  

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:
Nice design. Nice placement. Watch out at the bottom for dropping out of title safe.  

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4.5______

COMMENTS:
Clever movement to reveal the type. It feels like the image is about the type, but you still give the image a little showcasing in the beginning.  


Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:  Animations have personality and it definitely helps with the circles and such.

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:  Good movement, structure of the text is lost. 

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______4_____

COMMENTS:  I like the use of negative space.

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______5_____

COMMENTS:  I really liked the subtle movement in addition to the pan up. Cool stuff.

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:  Bland animation and type, BORING LOL OMG

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____5_______

COMMENTS:  Really Slick introduction and build with a great payoff.

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______4_____

COMMENTS:  Your missing a word

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______3_____

COMMENTS:  Your missing a word, ease your movements.





Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ________3___

COMMENTS: I didn't like the way it came in with the cuts, because I got confused at first. SOme of the type is very small and hard to read. 

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____4_______

COMMENTS: I liked the way it came in but again some of the type is very small and came in very slowly. Thetype composition isn't as interesting either. 

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____2____

COMMENTS: At first the composition looks good but when I started reading I read and first. The way the composition comes in is very slow. 

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS:I like how the type relates to the image but the way it came in was kind of boring. Also its in the corner. 

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____1_______

COMMENTS:Don't like the composition, I don't know what goes first when I'm reading it and the way the image came in was very slow and boring. 

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: I like the end product, but I wish the type was more activated in the canvas. The cuts were ok because you get to see the image more, but I don't really like them. 

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _______3____

COMMENTS: Make your type bigger!!! It seems inconsistent when you play so much with the scale of your type, and the OF looks ambiguous. 

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ___3________

COMMENTS: I like the composition, but some of his type is stuck in a corner. It was very safe. 





Daniel

#1
SCORE: 3

COMMENTS: The composition is interesting although the way they come in not so much.

#2
SCORE: 4

COMMENTS: I really liked how you use a photograph as one of the lines or boxes of your composition, and I like how with the movement you camouflage it's real nature. 

#3
SCORE: 4

COMMENTS: I liked the way that the text came in.

#4
SCORE: 5

COMMENTS: I loved this one. I think it might be your image but I absolutely loved it. Also the type and the use of the boxes is very successful.

#5
SCORE: 3

COMMENTS: This wasn't as successful as the others.

#6
SCORE: 4

COMMENTS: I liked the cuts in this one, it was cool. Maybe you don't need the last cut since it's so fast you can't really enjoy it.

#7
SCORE: 3

COMMENTS: ...representation!! I was waiting for this word to come out from somewhere and surprise us, but it never happened. The design is strong. Congrats.

#8
SCORE: 3

COMMENTS: The composition is cool although I'm not too crazy about the way it came in.








Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:everything works together andappeared well on the screen.

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: a little slow when showing up on the screen

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: The bottom part could be brought up a tiny bit.

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: The word "design" it a little hard to read.

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:the words "writing" and "design' appear a bit too quickly, maybe waiting until the building id fully in position before appearing.

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: A few of the words a a little hard to read.

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ___4________

COMMENTS: i like how your eyes follow the thing as they appear.

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______3_____

COMMENTS: "of" and "representation" are hard to read.




Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) _____4______

COMMENTS: Composition of this was very nice but the movement was a
little weird. Like the idea just needs to be pushed further.

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) _____5______

COMMENTS: I really like the movement in this with the pipes and the
composition is very interesting. Maybe could be sped up a little
though.

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) ______3_____

COMMENTS: This study looks the same as the last study to me. But nice
composition!

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) ____4_______

COMMENTS: Simple but very appealing in the movement of the image and
integration of text.

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) _____2______

COMMENTS: Kind of awkward, feels empty and the building movement
didn’t make sense.

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) _____4______

COMMENTS: I could hear drums playing along to this motion. I really
liked this one. The text positioning needs a little tweaking though.

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) _____2______

COMMENTS: Simple, and looks the same as the others.

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 ) _____3______

COMMENTS: Little more interesting movement but still looks to similar
to his other studies. The text readability needs work too.



Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   __3_________

COMMENTS:
type stair steps and feels too low.  

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ___5________

COMMENTS:
one of my favorites of today! all of the elements are designer choices and the movement is an animators choice. everything is aligned, clear, and easily read.  


#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____4_______

COMMENTS:
I love the fact you used dirty gritty images of the street. The movement isn't my favorite, I think it could be more interesting. 

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:
cool idea. nice design. A little too busy for me to read the type. Hold longer so I can translate it for my self and animate off the screen rather than a fade.  

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3_______

COMMENTS:
Not my favorite of yours but it works. It can me made more interesting if the placement wasn't so obvious: for example there is a straight line running through the middle that is a disconnect between the two sides. the type on the left is hard to read. 

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3.5_______

COMMENTS:
I like this idea. I like the dirt and grittiness that the textures give the composition. I think the movement on and off the frame can have that same feeling as well other than the sharpness it has now.  

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS:
Nice design. Nice placement. Watch out at the bottom for dropping out of title safe.  

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4.5______

COMMENTS:
Clever movement to reveal the type. It feels like the image is about the type, but you still give the image a little showcasing in the beginning.  




Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: like the entrance, overall type treatment was clean and held for a good amount of time.

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____2_______

COMMENTS: takes too long to reveal everything.

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3_______

COMMENTS: takes too long to reveal everything.

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____4_______

COMMENTS: panning effect is awesome! composition is appealing

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: squares should have came in faster. type is readable. 

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3_______

COMMENTS: interesting comp, build up is strong and pay-off is well deserved.

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____2______

COMMENTS:  Nice use of horizontals and verticals.

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____2______

COMMENTS:  element entrance is too slow. compostion is appealing overall.



Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: Movement is a little fast. Give more read time, but the composition is nice. Watch your margins at the bottom.

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: The movement of the image works with the type movement.

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: Ease in and out!

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: I really liked this one. You made the text a part of the image and the panning up was an interesting effect. My favorite out of all of them.

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: Well composed composition.

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: I really like the cuts between the shots and the final composition. The only thing that throws me off is the ending.

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: What happened to representation? Unless you meant to do that...

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: The introduction of the type was nice and smooth. Watch margin at the bottom.




Daniel

#1
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______2_____

COMMENTS: snake the game. bringing out the cheese. cheesy i mean.

#2
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: doesn't read well

#3
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: reminds me of an album cover, Nightmares on Wax; In a Space Outta Sound (2006)

#4
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ______3_____

COMMENTS: simple and to the point. missing the word and.

#5
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ____3_______

COMMENTS: reminds me of memory the card game.

#6
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____3______

COMMENTS: white space, too much.

#7
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   _____4______

COMMENTS: spaced evenly, type seems ambiguous, undeceive stuff, doesn't feel right.

#8
SCORE: ( 0 - 5 )   ___________

COMMENTS:
At this point we are going to take these studies and combine them into a print book and a demo reel.